Have this friend that I met through dVerse Poets, Paul (and a thank you to dVerse for such) an absolutely wondrous writer/poet whose work just astounds me and he recently wrote this at his site, Parallax
Bloody Paradise – a poem by Paul Vincent Cannon
Note: I wrote this in response to GP at Pacific Paratrooper following our respective comments on his post “Letter IX “A Day’s Venture” which is a post about his father Pvt. Everett “Smitty” Smith’s letter to his mother in regard to a rest day spent around Buna after allied forces liberated it. The post was in September 2024 (linked above).
Pacific Paratrooper is a blog based around the life and service of Smitty with the Headquarters Company/187th Regiment/11 Airborne during WWII. Follow the links above to read GPs excellent work.
“The war continues working, day and night.” Dunyah Mikhail
Bloody Paradise
Some things catch us by surprise
like the irony of a sabbath amidst
the trail of death and destruction
in an ever moving theatre of war,
feelings about shame and waste
momentarily cleared by
observations of the ordinary and
mundane albeit cultural experiences
allied with peace and quiet
buddies swimming in
pristine bejewelled water
shaded by coconut trees majestic,
a veritable paradise
framed by a cemetery screaming
“death becomes us,”
as Buna now breathes
Buna becomes today
tomorrow …
if not this war,
then the next.
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Well, this poem and the line “Death becomes us” struck me and I thought to take a bit of a liberty and write a “response”.
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Death Becomes Us
Death becomes us
said General to a friend
in kinder times
when this was just pieces
on a board
a game
over seas distance
closer now
or skies resistance
closer now
and simple regrets
closer now
like a kiss not had
from that pretty girl
at that pretty café
on that pretty shore of a foreign land
to be felt another day
but friend General had dispatched
in quick fashion in need
as only needs need
according to ordered needs
.
I have medals he said
.
Death becomes us
said the dispatched
wishing General hadn’t said that
I had other friends
really
he thought
who didn’t take this so seriously
and danced to tune
in kinder times
it was just a game
.
Death becomes us
said Devil and Lord
puffed chests
In accord
you have done our warned
work
all on your own
you wanted, you played
you moved pieces on a board
you played Devil and Lord
toward
an unquestioned end
.
Death becomes us
always becomes us
in dirt too soon
General
too soon
.
Tell her I think of her
her little pretty
or just pretty
in general
General
at that pretty little café
on that pretty foreign shore
wished
pretty
once
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Hope I did a justice in this uncalled call & response Paul

Thank you for sharing Paul’s poem in response to my father’s letter!
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Of course GP. It is powerful stuff.
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Thank you for the heads up on Paul’s blog, it is a new one for me. His Bloody paradise knocked my socks off. And the fact that it inspired such an amazing response from you, was proof enough that I need to keep track of his work!
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Definitely keep track of his work Violet. He’s a marvel.
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Wow, what a wonderful response, I do enjoy response poems and this one in particular, with layers of meaning. Many thanks Stephen ❤️
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Cheers Paul. Glad to have ya around.
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