(Something from a few months ago updated and revised some with a fresh eye now for a dVerse poets Open Link Night / 02-01-24)
Grains Of Stars
I am bits of ocean meet horizon pieces that are smaller
than
even
that
small
I know
I’ve seen the stars
remind
of universe
.
or maybe
a plan
grand
to just
just
plan
on faith
funny thing
faith
to place
all in
just
on faith
funny thing
faith
.
or
is it
just
just
simply
I
grain of
sand
on sand in sand until
I
almost
don’t
exist …
.
but
I do
I know
I am here
.
sitting in the lapping edge of surf and sky upping my shorts
until grains of stars fill my pockets
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Love the format and ending line: until grains of stars fill my pockets. Thanks for joining in our OLN.
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Thanks Grace. Something I wrote about how I felt back in my Florida days, when I would park the car somewhere along A1A in the early evening after work, and just head to the beach where I would usually have it to myself and just sit on the edge of the surf alone.
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I love that the craftsmanship and the arrangement of words make the poem feel like a slow cascade and I really loved the ending that enwraps it all; it makes me think how the notion of falling does not always have to be an image we associate with bad things.
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Thank you!! Wasn’t initially intended to be that kind of structure until it just started to fall that way, then I realized I liked the lot of single words like single grains. And no falling does not always have to be negative. Thanks again.
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Love the repetition, especially “funny thing, faith”. And I agree with grace, it ends beautifully.
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Ahhhh, thank you so much Kim and so appreciate you all enjoying my ending here. 🙂
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I enjoyed the progression in your poem and the wonderful way you ended it.
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Thank you Helen.
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“until grains of stars fill my pockets”–what a beautiful image! 🌟
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Thanks so much M!!!
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Stephen, your use of imagery and repetition, particularly with the word “just,” creates a contemplative atmosphere… This really resonates with me!
Much love,
David
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Thank you and I love to hear “really resonates with me!” 🙂
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Love those grains of stars… wonderful
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Much appreciated Bjorn!!
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