Crumbs For Crows (redux) – (poem)

New dVerse Poets prompt from Grace to write a Ballata which is this … (if I have it right, but know, me getting shit right can often be a big “if” by the way)

The first stanza has five lines with a repeat of the opening line in line five and a rhyme pattern of AbbaA, followed by four line stanzas with a rhyme pattern if bbaA, the capital A being the continually repeating initial first and last stanza line.

So I thought I would revisit something of mine, Crumbs For Crows, from a few years ago and revision it in an attempt to fit it here.

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Crumbs for Crows (redux)

Our unintended words are crumbs for crows

leavings, the wipe of a mouth

ill-formed ones that fall out

become a crow’s right to place in neat crow rows

Our unintended words are crumbs for crows

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The crows know what should be said

wait to pick up the errant instead

fashion crow homes in hoped forgotten mouth throws  

Our unintended words are crumbs for crows

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You cannot hide from what a crow knows

they sit on lampposts signposts timeposts to bestow

reminders of our less worthy us show

Our unintended words are crumbs for crows

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We wish we could word word blurted belched take back

those that that caused us to rack and rhyme away cover hack

our minds in time, can I return rhyme hide my low

Unintended words that are crumbs for crows

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Crows sit on lawns flitting from away easy hand raised

anger a thing these days crows know how your words have razed

your old comforts now just lost moments in tow

but in dim light unintended word crumbs for crows

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Crows ask of only one thing as they build from digress

can you ask stood words as stand up test

even ones you don’t wish to own

The unintended words that are crumbs for crows?

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They will pick you clean otherwise

And start anew



12 responses to “Crumbs For Crows (redux) – (poem)”

  1. So cool I love how the poem feels like the crow is kinda looking for you the whole way though. There is no hiding from the crows!

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    1. No there is not Paul. Thanks!

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  2. Crows are brilliant. There is a crow family who lives around my house. I love to watch them when they’re in the yard.

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    1. They are quite the creatures huh?

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    1. Oh thanks so much Kim!!! I really appreciate that!! 😊

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  3. Crows are so smart and they watch us all the time. Love the refrain of:

    Our unintended words are crumbs for crows.

    Thanks for joining in our poetry form challenge. Have a good weekend.

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    1. Thank ya Grace. And a good weekend back at ya!

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  4. Wow! Your opening/recurring line is such a hook! I really enjoyed your Ballata, Stephen.

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  5. Thank ya P!! I just thought that our unintended words, the ones regretted, are always still sitting out there to be picked up and …

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  6. There’s a rhythm and trickiness to this that I like. Kinda like crows themselves. I’m glad you decided to rework a poem to make it fit the form.

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