At The Edge Of The Surf (and dreaming) – (poem)

So the latest prompt at dVerse Poets asked to take into consideration Pablo Neruda’s poem “The Wide Ocean” and the line …

“Ocean, if you were to give, a measure, a ferment, a fruit of your gifts and destructions …”

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At The Edge Of The Surf (and dreaming)

I sat at the edge of the surf lap

salt breeze in my hair’s nose eye filling

it with clean crisp scented horizon to the curve and the fall

off the edge of the world and I swam tail tumbled with it (sea monsters be damned)

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I sat on the edge of the surf lap

salt wet well heavy sand in my short’s pockets filling

them with distant worlds as many as grains some say

soon nothing more than to clog the shower

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I sat in the edge of the surf lap

salt slap slapping the barnacled sides of swashbuckles filling

my childhood mind of salty peg legged cliches and snarky shoulder parrots

disguised now as distant cargo ships passing over the graves of my stories

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I sat with the edge of the surf lap

salt sound rushing, hovering, digging my ears filling

them with floating gull life hungered cries above

to sand dig crab scratching on bits of sun glinting worlds below trying to hide

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I sat am the whole of the surf lap

salt of earth and wind and sky and ocean filling

always ocean, especially ocean, filling

pockets with worlds in my tides



20 responses to “At The Edge Of The Surf (and dreaming) – (poem)”

  1. I could hear, feel and smell the ocean in this poem. I loved the repetition, like a wave and ears filled with the floating, hungered gulls. Nice. 🙂

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    1. Ahhh thanks so much Dianne (or PCat, I like PCat, hehe). So glad it was able to put you there! Can’t ask for more than that!

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  2. I agree with Dianne!

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  3. the repeat line and the offering of all the different outcomes makes such an interesting read and the last stanza is synthesis of all

    “always ocean, especially ocean, filling

    pockets with worlds in my tides”

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    1. Thank you Laura! The repetition wasn’t the initial intent but then I was back in Florida and this northern boy’s short time there years ago and how I loved to keep going back just to sit at the surf’s edge whenever I could.

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  4. The repetition echoes waves, and brings a great sense of place to your poem. Well done.

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    1. Thank you CW, it did end up echoing waves didn’t it, something I didn’t start out with in mind but kind of then went that way. Appreciate the noting.

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  5. This is expertly wrought! The use of repetition gives the feeling of ocean waves crashing on the shore 💖💖 Thank you so much for writing to the prompt!

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  6. No, thank you for the prompt Sanaa and I will take an ‘expertly wrought’ any day. And, as I have mentioned in other replies here, the repetition, like waves, was not the thought I started with.

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  7. I like the waves of this and how you became one with the sea.

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  8. I do as well, the waves as they lap. Thank ya!

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  9. Wave after wave of ocean washing over me and now I am yearning to sit “on the edge of surf lap”.

    Thank you for bringing the ocean to your readers, Stephen. Fabulous.

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    1. Thank ya Thank ya P!! Very much appreciated!!

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  10. I especially like these lines: “my childhood mind of salty peg legged cliches and snarky shoulder parrots

    disguised now as distant cargo ships passing over the graves of my stories”

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    1. Thanks Melissa!! This one really took me back to my short lived Florida days and the joy I would get driving home down A1A after work and just pulling the car over anywhere and heading to the ocean to sit for a bit.

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      1. Florida is one place I’ve never been. The closest beach to us here is about two hours away.

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  11. I love the personification/embodiment in that last stanza, the whole ocean experience really comes alive.

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  12. Ahhhhh, thanks so much Paul!!! 🙂

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