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Grains Of Stars (poem)

(Something from a few months ago updated and revised some with a fresh eye now for a dVerse poets Open Link Night / 02-01-24)

Grains Of Stars

I am bits of ocean meet horizon pieces that are smaller

than

even

that

small

I know

I’ve seen the stars

remind

of universe

.

or maybe

a plan

grand

to just

just

plan

on faith

funny thing

faith

to place

all in

just

on faith

funny thing

faith

.

or

is it

just

just

simply

I

grain of

sand

on sand in sand until

I

almost

don’t

exist …

.

but

I do

I know

I am here

.

sitting in the lapping edge of surf and sky upping my shorts

until grains of stars fill my pockets

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14 responses to “Grains Of Stars (poem)”

  1. Grace Avatar
    Grace

    Love the format and ending line: until grains of stars fill my pockets. Thanks for joining in our OLN.

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    1. Stephen J Frankenberry Avatar
      Stephen J Frankenberry

      Thanks Grace. Something I wrote about how I felt back in my Florida days, when I would park the car somewhere along A1A in the early evening after work, and just head to the beach where I would usually have it to myself and just sit on the edge of the surf alone.

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  2. Oloriel Avatar
    Oloriel

    I love that the craftsmanship and the arrangement of words make the poem feel like a slow cascade and I really loved the ending that enwraps it all; it makes me think how the notion of falling does not always have to be an image we associate with bad things.

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    1. Stephen J Frankenberry Avatar
      Stephen J Frankenberry

      Thank you!! Wasn’t initially intended to be that kind of structure until it just started to fall that way, then I realized I liked the lot of single words like single grains. And no falling does not always have to be negative. Thanks again.

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  3. Kim of Glover Gardens Avatar
    Kim of Glover Gardens

    Love the repetition, especially “funny thing, faith”. And I agree with grace, it ends beautifully.

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    1. Stephen J Frankenberry Avatar
      Stephen J Frankenberry

      Ahhhh, thank you so much Kim and so appreciate you all enjoying my ending here. 🙂

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  4. Helen Avatar
    Helen

    I enjoyed the progression in your poem and the wonderful way you ended it.

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    1. Stephen J Frankenberry Avatar
      Stephen J Frankenberry

      Thank you Helen.

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  5. merrildsmith Avatar
    merrildsmith

    “until grains of stars fill my pockets”–what a beautiful image! 🌟

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    1. Stephen J Frankenberry Avatar
      Stephen J Frankenberry

      Thanks so much M!!!

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  6. ben Alexander Avatar
    ben Alexander

    Stephen, your use of imagery and repetition, particularly with the word “just,” creates a contemplative atmosphere… This really resonates with me!

    Much love,
    David

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    1. Stephen J Frankenberry Avatar
      Stephen J Frankenberry

      Thank you and I love to hear “really resonates with me!” 🙂

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  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    Love those grains of stars… wonderful

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  8. Stephen J Frankenberry Avatar
    Stephen J Frankenberry

    Much appreciated Bjorn!!

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